It was a scene in which top military officials in WWI discuss their next site of attack.
On an intellectual level, it completely made sense and moved the story forward.
And by intellectual, I mean informational.
The author clearly illustrated the scene, "generals decide where to send troops"
On an emotional level, it didn't do a thing.
One: the main character was not in the scene
Two: none of the official's arguments brought up what their decision would be to the main character from a relationship stand point.
Two possible ways this scene could have worked on an emotional level.
One: The top official could have said, this is the plan, and I'm going to send my son in there to get it done. (if the son was the main character, even stronger)
Two: One official could have said, "There will be too many casualties." And the top official could have said "Do I look like I care? What's a soldier's life worth? I want this done. Now."
You may have noticed that one) emotional scenes address relationships and two) emotional scenes evoke Theme.
In my first solution - we're talking about Sacrifice. We're possibly talking about selfless honor. And we're talking about a man and his son.
In my second solution - we're talking about sacrifice. We're possibly talking about selfish glory, selfish honor. And we're talking about a leader who cares nothing for the men who fight for his country, that make him look good.
So for a scene to work on an emotional level, the writer must address a relationship issue.
For a scene to work on an intellectual level, the write must address informational issues.
Note of Caution:
If you are a write who outlines their story before writing scenes, make sure you are addressing the emotional level.
It can be easy to write: in this scene my character goes here and does this and so on and so forth.
However, when you start writing scenes, you'll find that you've only addressed the intellectual, informational aspects of the story.
Question for my readers: What's a good way to outline emotional information?
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